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    End of the line…wip ^_^

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    • Chantal Goetheer
      Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

      @Asyas_illos me and my son both like the wall more. Though they both look good that broadwalk is more present while it's more a background item.

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      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

        @Chantal-Goetheer thank you, very helpful!

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        • Asyas_illos
          Asyas_illos last edited by

          Here’s a side by side comparison
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          • Chantal Goetheer
            Chantal Goetheer @Asyas_illos last edited by

            @Asyas_illos the wall. The broadwalk catches the eye too much.

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            • AngelinaKizz
              AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

              @Asyas_illos the wall!!! It's fantastic and draws the attention to the boat.

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              • Mia Clarke
                Mia Clarke @Asyas_illos last edited by

                @Asyas_illos Love this illo, it's my favourite of your Kamaris thus far. 👏👏👏 The big white dog dissappears into the background for me, and I didn't see him until I zoomed in. Maybe you could make it grayer to give it more of a silhouette?

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                • MarcRobinson
                  MarcRobinson @Asyas_illos last edited by

                  @Asyas_illos I'm definitely drawn more to the wall version. It's a really great concept and such a well painted piece. Fantastic.

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                  • Asyas_illos
                    Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                    Well the wall it is then thanks everyone!

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                    • Asyas_illos
                      Asyas_illos last edited by

                      Ok I’ve done it again folks another Kamari idea popped into my head just now, it’s not too creative a story and possibly a bit dark. What do you guys think? Sorry for the very rough sketch!
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                      • Griffin McPherson
                        Griffin McPherson @Asyas_illos last edited by

                        @Asyas_illos I really like this one! This one is definitely my favorite of your Kamari ideas so far. Don’t have much feedback at this point other than keeping going!

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                        • Asyas_illos
                          Asyas_illos @Griffin McPherson last edited by

                          @Griffin-McPherson awesome me too!

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                          • marek.halko
                            marek.halko @Asyas_illos last edited by

                            @Asyas_illos The stone works pretty good. I would personally prefer the walkboard (somehow imagining the story with that), it would make the picture too busy though... but there is always way how to cheat with background and placing objects in the shadow or light. Something like this for instance:

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                            • Asyas_illos
                              Asyas_illos @marek.halko last edited by

                              Thank you for the feedback @marek-halko your simplicity never ceases to amaze me! You seriously have a gift, it seems to come so naturally for you. You are the epitome of work smarter not harder. Have you published anything yet? I will buy it no joke.

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                              • Asyas_illos
                                Asyas_illos last edited by

                                Think I’m set on this color comp, I want it very green to represent the energy of life and nature.
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                                • Sarah VanDam
                                  Sarah VanDam @marek.halko last edited by

                                  @marek-halko Wow, the swell of the water is such an interesting design idea, and really adds to the tension of the piece, too!

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                                  • AngelinaKizz
                                    AngelinaKizz @marek.halko last edited by

                                    @marek-halko incredible! I'm with Asya, you're something else! Hella talented. And I too would buy 😃

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                                    • Miriam
                                      Miriam @Asyas_illos last edited by Miriam

                                      @Asyas_illos I love how this has developed! It looks great. The seagulls addition is adorable.

                                      Just one thing - the large dark dog’s back is creating a tangent with the white dog’s mouth, so it would be good to move it forward a little.

                                      It’s really ok either way, but I prefer it with 3 dogs (small, medium, & large - without the tiny one). I think the dark tiny dog pulls attention back to that side of the page & away from the action.

                                      Regarding the fishing line, you could take it out altogether. It would simplify the image, and since he has a big net, it looks like he could just be fishing that way. I don’t think you can get hauls like that using a rod. (But I don’t even eat fish, let alone catch them!)

                                      Oh, & you can draw really cute fish, too - just like @marek-halko ! 😁

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                                      • Asyas_illos
                                        Asyas_illos @Miriam last edited by

                                        @Miriam thanks for that! I’ll adjust the dogs a bit☺️

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                                        • Asyas_illos
                                          Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

                                          So I just had brain fart of a whole day yesterday starting with a panic attack fueled morning, and when I was sketching this last night and picking colors I was working on the same layers and it was looking very painterly like my old stuff and completely strayed from how I’ve been working recently. I don’t know what happened but I am really loving it I just hope it still looks somewhat like my style just with bit of a rendering difference? I don’t know what I’m getting at yesterday was just an off day but ended with good artistic choices?

                                          Anyway….. I’m still working on the same layer with the exception of the weasel which I wanted to ask if it draws too much attention I will do a dark greenish blue wash over once it’s done, just blocked in right now.

                                          Thanks guys
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                                          • Miriam
                                            Miriam @Asyas_illos last edited by Miriam

                                            @Asyas_illos I didn't see the wall vs. wooden pier posts earlier. I like the stone wall.

                                            For the piece with the ghost:
                                            It took me a second to realize it's her own bones.

                                            Lightening the weasel was a good choice. I don't think it's distracting. But it is bothering me a little that the ghost kind of comes out of its head. Maybe you could try moving the weasel up or down the slope a little bit.

                                            What's distracting for me is: Why are the bones only partially buried? But I guess that could be part of the story. Maybe she died there, and it got partially covered / scattered over time.

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