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    WIP March book cover composition. Critiques welcome.

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    • burvantill
      burvantill Moderator last edited by

      I like this idea. Looking forward to see the progress.

      Lisa Burvant
      www.lisaburvant.com
      Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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      • ArtofAleksey
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        • ArtofAleksey
          ArtofAleksey last edited by

          Ok here Are a few other compositions I like the ripples in the water more. What does everyone else think?
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          • djly
            djly last edited by

            @Aleksey - I think I like the third composition best in the newest thumbnail set. I agree, the ripples are nice!

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            • J
              JennyJones last edited by

              Big yes to the ripples! I love the current take on the composition.

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              • ArtofAleksey
                ArtofAleksey @djly last edited by

                @djly @JennyJones thanks
                I think I can add a little more components if I push it up a little more.

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                • Sas
                  Sas @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                  @Aleksey Oh this is nice and so brilliant!!! I loved your foreground though. It gives your piece depth and a 3D lookish effect. The lines in the text is brilliant but makes it a bit difficult to read. Maybe you can make the whole text part of the water? It kind of looks like the text is submerging from underneath the surface. I don't know if that's the effect you were looking for though. I love your reflection of the prince in the water!

                  Can't wait to see your progress!

                  https://www.instagram.com/sasmakkinje/

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                  • CobaB
                    CobaB @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                    @Aleksey Oh wow! Yes, the first one you've got there with the top down view and the ripples is lovely!!

                    ♥ Illustration : https://www.instagram.com/coba_illustration/

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                    • ArtofAleksey
                      ArtofAleksey @CobaB last edited by

                      @CobaB @Sas ok so what I’ve gathered so far is:
                      Foreground elements are good but dont overcrowd the piece
                      Keep the ripples but make the text clearer.

                      I might do a thing where it says “Frog” on the surface of the water, and the O is a lilypad while the word “prince” is being reflected in the water much like the prince himself.

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                      • Sas
                        Sas @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                        @Aleksey Great ideas!!! 😃

                        https://www.instagram.com/sasmakkinje/

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                        • CobaB
                          CobaB @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                          @Aleksey Yes that sounds brilliant! Yeah it doesn't feel like you are overcrowding it though. So far it looks like you're on the right track and there's enough breathing space. I guess it will come down to how you render and colour it. Very creative with the O, love it!

                          ♥ Illustration : https://www.instagram.com/coba_illustration/

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                          • ArtofAleksey
                            ArtofAleksey @CobaB last edited by

                            @CobaB @Sas thanks. Im so excited to render this because ive been practicing with pen and ink more than brush pens lately. At the very least this will be a good portfolio piece.

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                            • CobaB
                              CobaB @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                              @Aleksey Cool! Will you also do the colour by hand? I'm not personally that brave! I like to rough out on paper and then colour digital and sometimes I will ink by hand with a brush pen or else those old fashioned dip in ink pens.

                              ♥ Illustration : https://www.instagram.com/coba_illustration/

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                              • ArtofAleksey
                                ArtofAleksey @CobaB last edited by

                                @CobaB no i will color digitally. I will eventually learn how to paint better but because of time I’m only inking traditionally then coloring on my ipad

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                                • ArtofAleksey
                                  ArtofAleksey last edited by ArtofAleksey

                                  So the last couple days I’ve been doing some research and asking people I know that understand art and art history better what it is they like about my art. Trying to hone in on when does my art “work” and some of the feedback I’ve been getting on my pieces is that it reminds them of older illustrations done in the 1900s but more cartoony so After doing some research and a few renditions I think I understand it a tiny bit better.
                                  So here is my rough sketch, what iz thoughts?
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                                  • Sas
                                    Sas @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                    @Aleksey This looks great! I cant wait to see you work on this further.

                                    https://www.instagram.com/sasmakkinje/

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                                    • CobaB
                                      CobaB @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                      @Aleksey looks good, but I hope the background won't distract from the main detail and title x

                                      ♥ Illustration : https://www.instagram.com/coba_illustration/

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                                      • ArtofAleksey
                                        ArtofAleksey @CobaB last edited by

                                        @CobaB if i do this right it should draw your eye to the pond firsr. But even if it doesnt im having lots of fun with this piece

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                                        • andersoncarman
                                          andersoncarman @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                          @Aleksey I like this most recent thumbnail except for one thing. The title. I love this as an illustration if you take the title out. but when you add it in, it just becomes too bottom heavy. As an illustration, I like that it has that breathing room on the top third but it is so overcrowded down at the bottom now. I would suggest placing the title up in the top third. not just because that is where title normally goes, but your composition is made for it! you could even make the title out of the rocks and have the water flow around them into the pond! Also, don't forget the author "Brothers Grimm"

                                          Love this! such a clever idea! can't wait to see it complete!

                                          Cheers,
                                          Anderson Carman

                                          https://www.andersoncarman.com/
                                          https://www.instagram.com/andersoncarman/

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                                          • ArtofAleksey
                                            ArtofAleksey @andersoncarman last edited by

                                            @andersoncarman these are some good points. Thanks ill try that out. Leaving the bottom open makes it look a lot better.

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