The moment before WIP

Heather Boyd

And in the moonlight it would glow or sparkle that would be pretty.

Susan Marks

@Braden-Hallett I like 1 and 3 better because they each give me the sense of the jumper being apprehensive. With 2 I like the perspective and composition, but I don’t really feel the jumper’s emotions. I read into your statement that these would be emotions of the jumper. Now they could be of the watchers but I don’t experience the watchers in 2 as being anxious. Maybe a little bit impatient. I keep wanting to see someonenbiting their nails.

I’m impressed with how good all of the comps are.

burvantill

I like two. You have the opportunity to see his face and how scared he is with that one.
ps, I like your thumbnail layout. It soothing to my OCD.

sigross

@Braden-Hallett I think 3 as a first person perspective it makes it that extra bit daunting. The mention of sharks in the water made me think it could be turned into a cliff dive - that would make the background more dynamic with moving water and rocks sticking out on the way down.

MichaelaH

I go for 2 also, we get to see his "before" face

Kevin Longueil

@Braden-Hallett I vote for two also - seems like it has much more potential for story

I vote for number 2 as well, that composition is amazing and i like that we'd see the reaction on his face!

Nyrryl Cadiz

I prefer 2 but with a more closer shot of the character

Erin.Cortese

@nyrrylcadiz I really like the anxiety that #1 and #3 invoke. I feel like it puts the viewer right in the moment. I think #2 is the safe and reliable composition, but lacks a little in impact.

*After zooming in, I actually changed my mind a bit. When blown up, the perspective in number #2 gives a similar feeling of anxiety. So I think #2 and #3. But I still love the idea of the viewer being in the moment.

braden H

@Chip-Valecek Sharks in a pool is exactly what I was thinking of doing when the challenge was related to fear I brainstormed a bunch of ideas for 'the moment before' but kept coming back to the pool.

I may still do a version with sharks because I love the idea

braden H

Thanks everyone for the feedback! I wasn't thinking that #2 would be what people were drawn to

I think I'll nix the 'impatient' keyword and have the audience below watching apprehensively and biting their nails. So apprehensive and vertigo will be my keywords.

IanS

I'm late to the party but I love the composition of 2. Like you've said you can do some great character reactions with the foreground characters. I'm looking forward to seeing this develop!

braden H

Okkedokee! Thanks again for all the feedback thus far

Here are colour comps! I liked the girders, but like the emptiness of the blue sky more.

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Rough sketch!

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And lineart!

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Next comes cutting shapes, local colour and then paint!

Susan Marks

@Braden-Hallett is amazed with your speedy progress!
I love the look on the jumper’s face.

Are the people below in the water? If yes, why are they wearing clothes vs swimsuits?

braden H

@Susan-Marks Thanks!

The people below are in the water. The boy's not wearing a shirt, and the girl's got a swimsuit onesie (or whatever it's called) and a swimming cap.

My swimming teacher always used to wear a shirt in the pool (because of the sun, I suppose) so it seemed right at the time. I'll probably put 'coach' across the back of the shirt or something to really reinforce his role

uzma

Wow, that was fast. I was going to vote for 2, and I'm glad you went with it. Love the way it's turning out so far Can really feel the suspense!

braden H

@uzma Thanks! Gotta strike while the iron's hot and you've got access to the forge, right?

braden H

And done with this for the day. I'll see how far I can get tomorrow.

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Coley

I liked number two best as well! you certainly captured that intimidating feel of this situation, great storytelling of that moment before

ArtofAleksey

@Braden-Hallett ooo I like the water reflection nice touch.