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    • sigross
      sigross @braden H last edited by

      @Braden-Hallett I think 3 as a first person perspective it makes it that extra bit daunting. The mention of sharks in the water made me think it could be turned into a cliff dive - that would make the background more dynamic with moving water and rocks sticking out on the way down.

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      • MichaelaH
        MichaelaH last edited by MichaelaH

        I go for 2 also, we get to see his "before" face

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        • Kevin Longueil
          Kevin Longueil SVS OG @braden H last edited by

          @Braden-Hallett I vote for two also - seems like it has much more potential for story

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          • ?
            A Former User last edited by

            I vote for number 2 as well, that composition is amazing and i like that we'd see the reaction on his face!

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            • Nyrryl  Cadiz
              Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

              I prefer 2 but with a more closer shot of the character πŸ˜ƒ

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              • Erin.Cortese
                Erin.Cortese Moderator @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by Erin.Cortese

                @nyrrylcadiz I really like the anxiety that #1 and #3 invoke. I feel like it puts the viewer right in the moment. I think #2 is the safe and reliable composition, but lacks a little in impact.

                *After zooming in, I actually changed my mind a bit. When blown up, the perspective in number #2 gives a similar feeling of anxiety. So I think #2 and #3. But I still love the idea of the viewer being in the moment.

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                • braden H
                  braden H @Chip Valecek last edited by

                  @Chip-Valecek Sharks in a pool is exactly what I was thinking of doing when the challenge was related to fear πŸ™‚ I brainstormed a bunch of ideas for 'the moment before' but kept coming back to the pool.

                  I may still do a version with sharks because I love the idea πŸ™‚

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                  • braden H
                    braden H last edited by

                    Thanks everyone for the feedback! I wasn't thinking that #2 would be what people were drawn to πŸ™‚

                    I think I'll nix the 'impatient' keyword and have the audience below watching apprehensively and biting their nails. So apprehensive and vertigo will be my keywords.

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                    • I
                      IanS last edited by

                      I'm late to the party but I love the composition of 2. Like you've said you can do some great character reactions with the foreground characters. I'm looking forward to seeing this develop!

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                      • braden H
                        braden H last edited by

                        Okkedokee! Thanks again for all the feedback thus far πŸ™‚

                        Here are colour comps! I liked the girders, but like the emptiness of the blue sky more.

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                        Rough sketch!

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                        And lineart!

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                        Next comes cutting shapes, local colour and then paint!

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                        • Susan Marks
                          Susan Marks @braden H last edited by

                          @Braden-Hallett is amazed with your speedy progress!
                          I love the look on the jumper’s face.

                          Are the people below in the water? If yes, why are they wearing clothes vs swimsuits?

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                          • braden H
                            braden H @Susan Marks last edited by

                            @Susan-Marks Thanks!

                            The people below are in the water. The boy's not wearing a shirt, and the girl's got a swimsuit onesie (or whatever it's called) and a swimming cap.

                            My swimming teacher always used to wear a shirt in the pool (because of the sun, I suppose) so it seemed right at the time. I'll probably put 'coach' across the back of the shirt or something to really reinforce his role πŸ™‚

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                            • uzma
                              uzma last edited by

                              Wow, that was fast. I was going to vote for 2, and I'm glad you went with it. Love the way it's turning out so far πŸ™‚ Can really feel the suspense!

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                              • braden H
                                braden H @uzma last edited by

                                @uzma Thanks! Gotta strike while the iron's hot and you've got access to the forge, right?

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                                • braden H
                                  braden H last edited by

                                  And done with this for the day. I'll see how far I can get tomorrow.

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                                  • Coley
                                    Coley last edited by

                                    I liked number two best as well! you certainly captured that intimidating feel of this situation, great storytelling of that moment before πŸ˜‰

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                                    • ArtofAleksey
                                      ArtofAleksey @braden H last edited by

                                      @Braden-Hallett ooo I like the water reflection nice touch.

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                                      • JerrySketchyArt
                                        JerrySketchyArt last edited by

                                        You are flying through this one! Looks great so far. Can't wait to see the final.

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                                        • burvantill
                                          burvantill Moderator @braden H last edited by

                                          @Braden-Hallett make it a Hawaiian shirt with floral print. Lol!

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                                          • davidhohn
                                            davidhohn SVS Instructor Pro last edited by

                                            Scrolling through this thread was so fun! Great keywords, solid feedback from everyone in the forums!

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