Hello! Would love a critique on this art!
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Hi guys! I've been working on this piece for Slowvember. Sorry I haven't posted anything else about it yet - I'm pretty bashful when it comes to forums. But you guys are too cool not to participate!
Anyways, I've gotten to a place on this piece where I'm not sure how to proceed. This style is different than anything I'm used to and is mostly motivated by my dream portfolio. Where could I improve on this piece?
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OMG this is super cool, I love the banana concept! Sorry I don't have much critique to share ^_^; I'm not familiar with the style you're going for
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@Daisy Thank you!! I'm not sure if know myself lol
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Hmmm, tough one. It's looking pretty rad. I'd maybe consider adding some linework details to a few of the roofs, maybe put some warmer yellow accents on the bananas? Maybe eyes/mouth? I really love it overall- style, color palette and balance of the composition with the busy lower half vs simpler upper. Great job and fun concept!
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@TessaW Thank you!! That's a good idea with the nanners - I'll give it a try!
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Maybe some light and shadow on the ground around the bananas to ground them. And some more rendering on the nanners themselves to connect them with the overall picture. They seem important but not finished. Good color scheme
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@SFischer if you post your dream portfolio we might get more of the direction your trying to go. But your larger character and the back sky looks like it’s more defined and the forward elements and the banana coloured shapes seem to converge and bump into each other more sporadically or accidentally reflects the chaos the poor bananas are feeling. It made me chuckle
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@burvantill - Yes good call! Grounding the nanners should really lock them into the composition. Thank you!!
@Heather-Boyd - Thank you for pointing that out! I couldnt quite put my finger on why it felt like 2 different styles. I'll try putting a little chaos up top and some more definition in the bottom and hopefully that will balance out. Thank you!
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I love the concept! It's really fun! I would add more bananas (could there be a small street further back? Or bananas running between the houses?) to enhance the idea of a crowd that is panicking. Right now, it looks more like there is a small group that is being scared off by the gorilla. I also agree with the feedback shared by others: more details on the bananas would be interesting to make them pop out from a less defined background (which is probably not a main focal point and is already working well). Great work!
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@SFischer love it! Maybe some extra shadows or shading behind the buildings to create dimension between the structures and the sky?
It’s a fun piece for sure!
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I really love the color palette you chose for the buildings and sky. your line work on the buildings is very free, I love it. I did not catch that those were bananas at first...I saw ghosts. Maybe a little more yellow and some of that same line work you used for the background shapes but possibly even bolder strokes since the bananas are in the foreground. The apes expression looks mildy scared/suprised by the bananas...like he's not sure why they are running away. Makes me curious of what the story is.
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Hi there, I love this it's great and funny too. I agree with a comment made below about details or shading on the background buildings and something to show the bananas or on the ground, or maybe they're not? Also maybe the left arm should be a bit thicker at the top? I'm not sure about that but maybe worth a try? Love your colour palette btw.
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@SFischer I just love this. That’s all I have to say. It makes me smile.
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This is just an awesome piece. I don’t think there’s much to critique here. Great job!
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@KaraDaniel Thank you for your perspective! The bananas do need a facelift. The ape's expression was intended to be somewhat harmless while his size is driving the bananas bananas!
I will post an update soon. Thanks again!
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@Elena-Marengoni I actually did play with the idea of more bananas in the scene as well as some dimension in the street but I couldn't make it read well. It threw off the whole dang composition
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@Jeremy-Ross Hmm that seems like it would be very helpful. Gracias!
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@Rachel-Horne You know I've had the same thought. That arm has been in periphery and I don't think I ever tried beefing that up. Thank you for your advice and kind words :smiling_face_with_open_mouth:
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Thank you both for your positivity! It means a lot to hear
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@SFischer It is so funny can not see anything wrong ,just maybe put some cartoony eyes on the bananas.
