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    February contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always welcome!

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    • burvantill
      burvantill Moderator last edited by

      I like all three but the I really like the gesture of the night falling in A & B, although I have to say, the little light under the umbrella(?) doesn’t seem to fit with the flow of the rest of the image in both. I like the idea but I think it needs a design adjustment. A is my favorite. I like balloons. πŸ™‚

      Lisa Burvant
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      • eriberart
        eriberart last edited by

        I really like A! I think the idea and composition is great, however I do find the person holding the umbrella a little distracting... Maybe you could combine the idea of A and C, and have a child in the window of the house in A looking out in amazement? You would probably have to play with the scale of the house in that case though

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        • xin li
          xin li last edited by

          All of these are great. I especially love the concept A. I agree with @eriberart that the yellow window of the house and the yellow light under the umbrella are competing for the attention.
          To me the main story is the two kids spilling the night from the buckets. I would also consider making the kid on the ground a cat, or a dog, just to keep the focus on the two kids above the sky.

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          • braden H
            braden H last edited by

            @burvantill @eriberart @xin-li Interesting! I'll play around with moving the house and window to the umbrella holder spot. If the balloon goers are the focus, it'll be fun to play around with their design a little (they were going to be very silhouetted).

            I have another idea to use the night falling on an umbrella

            Thanks for the feedback! πŸ˜ƒ

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            • chrisaakins
              chrisaakins last edited by

              @Braden-Hallett Yup. A. no doubt. I strongly agree with the window idea of the amazed kid. I think the umbrella thing leaves me thinking "hmmm..so how does that work exactly?" and throws me out into disbelief. Cool concept. I was thinking of something along the same lines but decided to go the "things go bump in the night" route instead."

              Chris Akins
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              • braden H
                braden H @chrisaakins last edited by

                @chrisaakins Lot's of votes for A! Thanks for the feedback πŸ™‚

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                • braden H
                  braden H last edited by

                  I cleaned up option A. Initially the window was lit, but it was still really overpowering, so I figured, why not dark? I think the star that's fallen too far onto the roof is enough of a draw to bring the eye down. Also, blue balloons. If the kids in the balloons are the focal point, they gotta contrast more πŸ™‚

                  Or maybe I could have the moon embedded in the thatched roof?

                  I also added an option. I REALLY like the idea of an umbrella blocking nightfall. Dunno why πŸ™‚

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                  • idid
                    idid last edited by

                    So lovely, all of them! Though I love option A most!

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                    • Aaron_T
                      Aaron_T last edited by

                      Always love your concepts. I've been playing around with the idea of a dragon flying up from the horizon, pulling the night sky up with him, but now kind of feel like it may be too close in concept to yours. I need to get on the forum more often!

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                      • braden H
                        braden H @idid last edited by

                        @idid Still A! Sounds good πŸ˜ƒ

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                        • braden H
                          braden H @Aaron_T last edited by

                          @Aaron_T said in February contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always welcome!:

                          pulling the night sky up with him, but now kind of feel like it may be too close in concept to yours

                          I'm absolutely CERTAIN that my concepts are close to others (if not EERILY similar with option D) Please PLEASE run with your concept because I think it's really neat πŸ˜ƒ

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                          • Laurel Aylesworth
                            Laurel Aylesworth @braden H last edited by

                            @Braden-Hallett Oh my gosh...A!

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                            • braden H
                              braden H @Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

                              @Laurel-Aylesworth Yup. I think A's gonna win it πŸ™‚

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                              • braden H
                                braden H last edited by

                                I'm gonna do this one as well as option 'A' since it's really really easy and fast (and I really like it)

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                                • Chip Valecek
                                  Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @braden H last edited by

                                  @Braden-Hallett I really love the idea of A. But I am sure whatever you decide on will be amazing as always.


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                                  • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                    Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                                    They’re all amazing!

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                                    • baileyvidler
                                      baileyvidler last edited by

                                      @Braden-Hallett I love love love option A! That is so clever, I've never seen anything like it before!

                                      The umbrella idea is cool too. I do think it reads better when the night wraps around the umbrella. (Like your first post, rather than the second.)

                                      Bailey Vidler
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                                      • Coley
                                        Coley @braden H last edited by

                                        @Braden-Hallett ok A is really awesome but this really sells me on C as well. I am so glad you are doing both!

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                                        • braden H
                                          braden H last edited by

                                          I think A's the one to pursue, then πŸ™‚ Thanks everyone for weighing in.

                                          Churning out option C. I'm gonna add either a toy truck in the bottom left or a plushy earth hanging in the window.

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