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    February contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always welcome!

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    • braden H
      braden H last edited by

      Makin' some small changes. I think the direction the balloons are travelling is more readable now. Also, tall chimneys are best chimneys šŸ™‚

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      • Coley
        Coley @braden H last edited by

        @Braden-Hallett nice. This is going to be awesome. I think at first read the falling night could be read as hills. I’m sure that will change as it progresses. If it was a little transparent maybe near the top or sides it might help. Also I think with the one on the right where there are stars in the falling night and in the sky it helps with that transparent look . Such a cool idea šŸ’”

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        • braden H
          braden H @Coley last edited by

          @Coley said in February contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always welcome!:

          nice. This is going to be awesome.

          We'll see! This is usually where I screw up monumentally 😃

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          • braden H
            braden H last edited by

            Super duper light sketch! I may skew the moon a bit so it looks like it's still settling into place

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            • Coley
              Coley @braden H last edited by Coley

              @Braden-Hallett I've never seen your screw ups but maybe you hide them away! ( I know I usually do lol)
              The drawing is awesome. I love the vertical format

              https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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              • Heather Boyd
                Heather Boyd last edited by Heather Boyd

                I have reached the bottom šŸ™‚ and now I am feeling my feedback is a tad late....
                I think you should name your WIP tradition something like Hallett Holiday Tradition or something.

                A at the beginning and now I've lost track after so many reworkings did have an element of drama.

                B really does fall for me with all the energy created by a waterfall but maybe elements of good and bad dreams poured out could be interesting in general.

                C perhaps adding an additional element of "night" on the inside because the kid could stay in his pjs all day or just be having a nap. - really like the addition of the planet!

                D is cool but I felt more night coming down like window blinds and less on the fall part. That said white space is cool but maybe have the night pouring over the umbrella like rain instead of how you have it.

                My preference is the space one "C" because in part my nights are sleepless waiting for Star Trek Discovery to return (not really), I am drawing astronauts / dreaming up scenarios and for the art reason I like the negative space being white.

                Zzzzzz;

                part way through the night she remembered what she thought about her friend's work. "braden" she says barely conscious, "you are awesome, you get two done, where i struggle to get one in". THE END

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                Be blessed,

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                • braden H
                  braden H @Heather Boyd last edited by

                  @Heather-Boyd said in February contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always welcome!:

                  I think you should name your WIP tradition something like Hallett Holiday Tradition or something.

                  The Hallett travelling roadshow's work in progress palooza?

                  B's monthly trainwreck?

                  Fumbling for values and colour harmony in A flat minor.

                  Thanks for the feedback šŸ™‚ It's never too late!

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                  • braden H
                    braden H last edited by

                    Work progresses šŸ™‚

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                    • ArtofAleksey
                      ArtofAleksey @braden H last edited by

                      @Braden-Hallett very nice composition

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                      • braden H
                        braden H @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                        @Aleksey Thanks! I'm likin' how the trees point back to the badoons.

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                        • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                          Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @braden H last edited by

                          @Braden-Hallett i love it! It may be too dark tho. Also, this remids me of a Filipino folklore of how the world got its color. It goes something like when the world was created, the gods decided to give color to everything in it. The red god gave red, the orange god added orange, the third yellow and so on and so forth. Until all that was left was the black god. Seeing everything already had a color, she colored the sky black and hence forth created the beautiful night sky.

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                          • braden H
                            braden H @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                            @Nyrryl-Cadiz said in February contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always welcome!:

                            It may be too dark tho

                            Absolutely! This is gonna be a 'slowly raise the levels' kinda image, I think šŸ™‚

                            And that's an awesome story. I love creation myths. They're all so different yet all so very similar.

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                            • braden H
                              braden H last edited by

                              Work progresses!

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                              • Melanie Ortins
                                Melanie Ortins last edited by

                                Love how this is looking! A tiny bit of rim lighting on the house might make it pop a bit more though šŸ™‚

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                                • chrisaakins
                                  chrisaakins last edited by chrisaakins

                                  @Braden-Hallett The moon is clearly a reference to the USSR and then there is all the red in the sky, a nod the socialist regime. And its disappearing because of the efforts of young people! The lone star on the roof is about the loss of innocence and the diempowerment of the people!!! I think that this is a secret ploy to convert us all to Marxism!!! I've got my eye on you Braden.

                                  (Everyone is is being so nice, it seemed like I needed to shake things up a little with some artsy snarksy.)

                                  Chris Akins
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                                  • burvantill
                                    burvantill Moderator @chrisaakins last edited by

                                    @chrisaakins That flippin hilarious!!!🤣🤣🤣

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                                    • braden H
                                      braden H @chrisaakins last edited by

                                      @chrisaakins You broke the code! And to think I was going to put a hammer alongside that sickle šŸ™‚

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                                      • braden H
                                        braden H last edited by

                                        Work progresses!

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                                        • braden H
                                          braden H last edited by

                                          All cleaned up. I think it's close to done!

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