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    Thoughts/critique/ advice needed on typography for this illustration πŸ€”

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    • EliaMurrayArt
      EliaMurrayArt last edited by

      Though I will admit I do not often work with words/typography. My initial response is that I'd develop one of the top two.

      Just with a cursory glance, I had a tough time seeing the lighter colored font on the bottom.

      Personally I lean towards the top left. I find it to be the easiest to read.

      I'll let a more experienced typographical artist remark on whether vectors are necessary or not πŸ˜„

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      • TessaW
        TessaW last edited by

        Thank you @EliaMurrayArt for your thoughts!

        Website: www.tessawrathall.com

        Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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        • Tracy McCusker
          Tracy McCusker last edited by

          I agree with @EliaMurrayArt -- the top two are the most appealing! I also find the top left to be the easiest to read. The contrast with the white "the" and the green "Last Book" is a much more nuanced approach to the lettering than making it either fully green, or fully light/white-gray gradient.

          This is a really appealing type treatment, overall! I think the only thing that stands out to me is that the stem of the uppercase B in Book looks too crowded against the framing doorway. The K has a lot more room to breathe and is much easier to recognize at a glance. You might want to try a thumbnail where "Book" is shifted to the left to give it more space & make the word look slightly less crowded.

          (I fully understand that shifting the Book will probably also require you to shift "Last" over as well in order to keep the bottom of the S from running into the O. So I apologize if this suggestion triggers a cascade of extra work!)

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          • demotlj
            demotlj SVS OG last edited by

            I'm with the others on one of the top two. They are easier to read. The whole composition is really nice.

            Laurie DeMott
            instagram.com/demotlj

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            • Coley
              Coley last edited by

              Top left is my favourite. Easy to read but incorporates the web into the text. Pretty cool😎

              https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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              • TessaW
                TessaW @Tracy McCusker last edited by

                @Tracy-McCusker Thanks for your feedback! I'm willing to change anything and everything with the text, so I really appreciate the notes you gave me. ☺

                @demotlj Thank you! It helps to get a consensus.

                @Coley Awesome, thanks!

                Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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                • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                  Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @TessaW last edited by

                  @TessaW hi! I’m not a graphic designer nor do I know anything about text but I think you may be using one too many font styles? I think 1 or 2 would do but then again, I’m no expert so take this comment with a huge grain of salt.

                  Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
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                  • TessaW
                    TessaW @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                    @Nyrryl-Cadiz Thank you! I'll try it out with a more unified text style too see how it looks.

                    Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                    Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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                    • baileyvidler
                      baileyvidler @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                      Hi @TessaW! This looks really nice! I agree with @Nyrryl-Cadiz that maybe the styles could be unified. I love how you did "Book" and my vote is to make "The Last" match in style to "Book." I might also suggest adding a tiny bit more contrast between the text and background.

                      Regarding your vector question, I'm not sure. Normally, my impulse is to always vector type. But I'm concerned it wouldn't match the painterly style of the rest of the image...

                      Your composition here is fantastic! The shadow on the floor is such a nice touch.

                      Bailey Vidler
                      Portfolio: baileyvidler.com

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                      • J
                        jdubz last edited by

                        @baileymvidler said in Thoughts/critique/ advice needed on typography for this illustration πŸ€”:

                        Just a thought...

                        I'd even try darkening the letters even more - maybe match it to the darkest area of the curtains above. Maybe also put the spider web leading to the spider in front of the "T" of Last but keep it behind the "O". If the letters were even darker it would I think make that pop and then the line would lead the eye down into the words.

                        Josh White
                        https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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                        • TessaW
                          TessaW last edited by TessaW

                          @baileymvidler Thanks for your guidance! 😊

                          @jdubz Love the tweaks you mentioned. Subtle, but they make a big difference.

                          Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                          Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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                          • TessaW
                            TessaW last edited by

                            Ok, played with it a bit more using your suggestions. Any improvement? I think it's looking a bit better, eh? I would still need to clean it up, but I don't want to go too far without the design being more finalized.

                            Intruder text update 1.jpg

                            Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                            Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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                            • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                              Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @TessaW last edited by

                              @TessaW i love it!

                              Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                              Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                              YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                              • ?
                                A Former User @TessaW last edited by A Former User

                                @TessaW THE is emphasized in this when I read it. I think if you would change it to the same color as the rest and tone down the white of the web surrounding it, the whole thing would be perfect.

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                                • TessaW
                                  TessaW @Guest last edited by

                                  @carolinedrawing Thanks I'll give it a try.

                                  Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                                  Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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                                  • ?
                                    A Former User @TessaW last edited by

                                    @TessaW you know what, i just thought of another thing: all of the other letters fit within each other, and i think the 'THE' should do the same. If you move the center of the web to the top left, you can use the three web openings between the top of the A and T to fit the 'THE' in. You can also try shifting the center the opposite way to fit 'THE' closer to the L. That would unify all the words.

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                                    • Griffin McPherson
                                      Griffin McPherson last edited by

                                      Seems to me that the top left image is the easiest to read. The lighter letters work week in the web and the darker text below mixes well with the environment.
                                      For the right image the dark "the" feels out of place due to the value of it and the same goes for all of the text in the lower image.

                                      The first image looks great to me, looks very nearly finished to me so I’m eager to see the end result since you said you’re going to polish it even more.

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                                      • baileyvidler
                                        baileyvidler @TessaW last edited by

                                        @TessaW Gorgeous!

                                        Bailey Vidler
                                        Portfolio: baileyvidler.com

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                                        • J
                                          jdubz last edited by

                                          Yeah this is really popping. Looks great!

                                          Josh White
                                          https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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                                          • TessaW
                                            TessaW last edited by

                                            Thank you guys so much for your help! I've updated it one last time after the latest feedback and will choose from the iterations I've done with your help. If anyone wants to weigh in still, I'm all ears. It's nice to feel like I'm getting close to a final design. 😺 You guys are the best.

                                            Intruder text update 2.jpg

                                            Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                                            Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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