Horsebot updated concept thumbnail possibilities, please let me know what might work better?

burvantill

@Coley MIDDLE! MIDDLE! Lol. um, I vote for the middle one.

Coley

It was good to get all the feedback I’ve gotten. It’s really pushed me to keep exploring ideas. Getting closer again I think........at least I am feeling excited about this now. I’m excited with the connection between the characters now! still rough sketch idea phase .....still looking for crits and thoughts

Right now I think I might make horse bot a little bit more pony proportions versus horse proportions ie I made him smaller but I might thicken up his legs etc to look more like a naughty little Shetland pony bot vs thoroughbred lol.

Coley

Values thrown in to see about first quick read/silhouette

Neha Rawat

@Coley Wow! Your dedication to exploring so many concepts is inspiring! Really great stuff! I LOVE the horsebot!

For the latest sketch, how about making it a during-the-moment action scene? So the horse and girl have been galloping and the horsebot suddenly puts on his breaks and the girl is flung over. The horse gesture would be slanting back and the girl would be midair angled forward with her feet locked in and screaming.

You've come such a long way from your initial sketch. This is so great!

burvantill

@Coley LOVE THIS!!!!

Coley

@Neha-Rawat thanks so much. I'm going to test drive that idea a little today. I started to wonder recently that with my style often being a little realistic, it might look a bit too scary? For example my last month's contest piece with the little boy flying through the air, I wondered after if maybe because it was on the realistic side that he looked too vulnerable? I could be wrong. Just trying to be mindful! It made semi finals but Will and Jake didn't say what the problem was with it so I'm left guessing Ha ha. This month I might try out a more linework style, we'll see!!!!

deborah Haagenson

What if the horse gets into the sugar and gets hyper? He could still eat the flowers and throw the girl off.

Coley

@deborah-Haagenson fun idea! Will let that percolate at the back of my brain until I start drawing later today. Thanks

Coley

I'm also trying to figure out if the horse bot should be built from stuff that Lisa found around the house , eg right now it's bum is a metal colander from the kitchen. Or if it should be more polished and from a robot kit. Any thoughts on that appreciated.

burvantill

@Coley I like the colander. I would say go with bits from around the house.

Coley

Omg I’m still coming up with ideas lol.

EliaMurrayArt

@Coley oooo love the apple one! So much movement! I wonder have you tried playing with the angle a bit? What if the viewer was behind the apple, and the horse was lunging up at "us" - and the girl was falling behind. - Then we could see the little girls face of shock, and the horse's face of joy.

Coley

@EliaMurrayArt awesome thought, thanks! I might give that a go in a sketch. I’m liking the apple one the best too. I like the swoopy circular composition so I want to keep that. 3/4 view might work

Jeremy Ross

Hi @Coley, I like A! So original! May I suggest the horse looking at the camera with huge smile and dentures? How about adding some grandma reading glasses too?

Coley

@Jeremy-Ross thanks . I’ve moved on from that idea at this point but I thought that idea was fun will do it sometime in the future !

Coley

Final or close to final sketch. Will look at it with hopefully fresh eyes in the morning. I might need to change the back legs to look more like they’ve just pushed off the ground. Luckily all the years I spent in school drawing horses and not doing my schoolwork is helping me lol!

Coley

If anyone sees anything majorly wrong, if you happen to not be tired of me posting soooo many times lol, let me know. I’m a bit tired of looking at it will take a break and fiddle with it after a day or two.

I’m wondering if the lines to indicate motion are working or if anyone has a better idea.

EliaMurrayArt

@Coley this is looking great! I'm thinking you might want to bring some more branches/leaves into the mix. The lone twig with an apple seems a bit sparse to me. Perhaps look at some apple trees and add a whole one in to give more of an environment. You've still got time!

Coley

@EliaMurrayArt thanks! Will play with that and see what it looks like! Lots of time left for sure

demotlj

This is great! I don't know if you need the motion lines -- your characters convey the motion well to me.