11 Aug 2020, 19:41
@Annabishop Looks great! I'm excited to see what colors you pick!
Dragonfly WIP looking for feedback
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@Annabishop This is great, and I'm so glad you shifted the dragonfly to the right a bit. You might want to think about reducing the size of the pixie's head (the one on the left in the flower) because it's competing with the dragonfly pixie in order of importance (right now they seem equal). Values look good too. Can't wait to see the next version!
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@Annabishop Play with more thumbnails. This idea seems to close to the prompt image. Add something to the story. The use of tones is good showing focal point and my eye goes directly to the middle figure with the circular framing of the pond beneath it.
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Thank you everyone for the helpful feedback! I had some time today to make a (hopefully) improved version. I took @miranda-hoover's great suggestion of flipping the background so the main character is flying in to the image rather than flying out. Does this look better?
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@Annabishop I think this is looking great! I can't wait to see your progress on this drawing
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@Chris-Perry-0 When Jake posted the fairy and dragonfly image the day after I uploaded this WIP I did have a "Ahh crap" moment haha.
It may well mean I don't get votes in the contest since it looks unoriginal but winning the contest isn't really a priority. I'm more interested in using the contest as motivation to make a cool portfolio piece. -
@Annabishop hey,
*these comments are feedback from your original post.
Your values look good. I agree with those who have noted your character to centered. If you moved her over slightly to the right and maybe down a bit, I feel it is a bit uneasy near the top edge. And if you possibly overlapped the character and her ride overtop another Lilly pad (add to our perception of depth).
I recognized the shadows of the dragonflies a bit more but maybe make them more blurry because they are in motion and the actual critters more in focus but less focus than the main characters.
My last note is maybe adjust the two sizes of the pixie and the dragonfly she is riding, she feels to me she might be more weight on top of him/her. So I'd either make your pixie smaller or your dragonfly larger.
Water lilles are really among my very favorite flowers.
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@Annabishop Looks great! I'm excited to see what colors you pick!
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@Annabishop looking good! Your composition is lovely. I can't wait for your finished piece
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I love the perspective on this. I think your latest version is spot on. Can't wait to see it!
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@Annabishop Good. That is why I'm doing it as well. It gives you real life scenario for creating story driven images. Good Luck.
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Here's the latest version! I'm at the stage where I'm not sure if it's finished or not. What do you guys think? Are there any adjustments I could make to improve it?
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@Annabishop Beautiful piece! I love how her hair is flowing in the breeze! If it were me, Iād go through and add shadow and highlights just to give the painting a bit more dimension. Great job!
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@Annabishop hey its a beatiful piece!! Ready to go!
If you ask for adjusments...I think the image is already working but..mmm maybe you can add a little more light on the big flower to generate some contrast, but as I said is already working, good job!
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@alicia Thank you! I think you're right, I'll have a go at adding some more shadows and highlights.
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@Jordi-Ventura Thank you! I will have a go at adding some more highlights to the flower. I was a bit worried it would compete with the focal point if it had too much contrast but I'll try it out and see what it looks like.
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Hi! I'm new to SVS forums so I hope this is okay. I like a lot of things about your piece especially the world you've created here. I wonder if you could strengthen the focal point by darkening the flowers etc? As is, the three flowers, the girl on the dragonfly, and even the large lily pad on the bottom almost read as on the same plane? Good job and good luck!
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Thank you @Joanne-Roberts, @alicia, and @Jordi-Ventura for the feedback! Is this working better?
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@Annabishop hmmm honestly Anna I like more the last version.
It feels your darken more the image and burn it a little bit, the last version everything feels more organic, I dont know how to explain it!
Just my honest opinion! Anyways as I told you is a very good image you will be selected for sure ;)!
I did some paintover of I was pointing on my last coment, you already had a good mood on that image so if you want to improve it, its about adding little details here and there, working with adding some shadows or lights but being carefull to dont break all the value armony that you already have ( becouse its working! )
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@Jordi-Ventura I totally agree with everything Jordi said. Her paint over nails the types of shadows & highlights I had in mind.
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@Jordi-Ventura Thank you so much for taking the time to do a paint-over and give detailed feedback! Now that I look at the old version and new version side by side I totally see what you mean about it looking burnt and less organic. I was trying add more depth by darkening the background like @Joanne-Roberts suggested but I think I overdid it. I will have another go with the shadows!