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    • Anna Lindsay
      Anna Lindsay @Chris Perry 0 last edited by

      @Chris-Perry-0 When Jake posted the fairy and dragonfly image the day after I uploaded this WIP I did have a "Ahh crap" moment haha. šŸ˜… It may well mean I don't get votes in the contest since it looks unoriginal but winning the contest isn't really a priority. I'm more interested in using the contest as motivation to make a cool portfolio piece.

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      • Heather Boyd
        Heather Boyd @Anna Lindsay last edited by Heather Boyd

        @Annabishop hey,

        *these comments are feedback from your original post.

        Your values look good. I agree with those who have noted your character to centered. If you moved her over slightly to the right and maybe down a bit, I feel it is a bit uneasy near the top edge. And if you possibly overlapped the character and her ride overtop another Lilly pad (add to our perception of depth).

        I recognized the shadows of the dragonflies a bit more but maybe make them more blurry because they are in motion and the actual critters more in focus but less focus than the main characters.

        My last note is maybe adjust the two sizes of the pixie and the dragonfly she is riding, she feels to me she might be more weight on top of him/her. So I'd either make your pixie smaller or your dragonfly larger.

        Water lilles are really among my very favorite flowers. ā¤

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        • miranda-hoover
          miranda-hoover @Anna Lindsay last edited by

          @Annabishop Looks great! I'm excited to see what colors you pick!

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          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Anna Lindsay last edited by

            @Annabishop looking good! Your composition is lovely. I can't wait for your finished piece

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            • JoshuaDages
              JoshuaDages last edited by

              I love the perspective on this. I think your latest version is spot on. Can't wait to see it!

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              • Chris Perry 0
                Chris Perry 0 @Anna Lindsay last edited by

                @Annabishop Good. That is why I'm doing it as well. It gives you real life scenario for creating story driven images. Good Luck.

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                • Anna Lindsay
                  Anna Lindsay last edited by

                  Here's the latest version! I'm at the stage where I'm not sure if it's finished or not. What do you guys think? Are there any adjustments I could make to improve it?
                  dragonflyer copy.jpg

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                  • alicia
                    alicia @Anna Lindsay last edited by alicia

                    @Annabishop Beautiful piece! I love how her hair is flowing in the breeze! If it were me, I’d go through and add shadow and highlights just to give the painting a bit more dimension. Great job!

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                    • Jordi Ventura
                      Jordi Ventura last edited by

                      @Annabishop hey its a beatiful piece!! Ready to go!

                      If you ask for adjusments...I think the image is already working but..mmm maybe you can add a little more light on the big flower to generate some contrast, but as I said is already working, good job!

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                      • Anna Lindsay
                        Anna Lindsay @alicia last edited by

                        @alicia Thank you! I think you're right, I'll have a go at adding some more shadows and highlights.

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                        • Anna Lindsay
                          Anna Lindsay @Jordi Ventura last edited by

                          @Jordi-Ventura Thank you! I will have a go at adding some more highlights to the flower. I was a bit worried it would compete with the focal point if it had too much contrast but I'll try it out and see what it looks like. šŸ‘

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                            Joanne Roberts last edited by

                            Hi! I'm new to SVS forums so I hope this is okay. I like a lot of things about your piece especially the world you've created here. I wonder if you could strengthen the focal point by darkening the flowers etc? As is, the three flowers, the girl on the dragonfly, and even the large lily pad on the bottom almost read as on the same plane? Good job and good luck!

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                            • Anna Lindsay
                              Anna Lindsay last edited by

                              Thank you @Joanne-Roberts, @alicia, and @Jordi-Ventura for the feedback! Is this working better? dragonflyer2.jpg

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                              • Jordi Ventura
                                Jordi Ventura last edited by Jordi Ventura

                                @Annabishop hmmm honestly Anna I like more the last version.

                                It feels your darken more the image and burn it a little bit, the last version everything feels more organic, I dont know how to explain it!

                                Just my honest opinion! Anyways as I told you is a very good image you will be selected for sure ;)!

                                I did some paintover of I was pointing on my last coment, you already had a good mood on that image so if you want to improve it, its about adding little details here and there, working with adding some shadows or lights but being carefull to dont break all the value armony that you already have ( becouse its working! )

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                                • alicia
                                  alicia @Jordi Ventura last edited by

                                  @Jordi-Ventura I totally agree with everything Jordi said. Her paint over nails the types of shadows & highlights I had in mind.

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                                  • Anna Lindsay
                                    Anna Lindsay last edited by

                                    @Jordi-Ventura Thank you so much for taking the time to do a paint-over and give detailed feedback! Now that I look at the old version and new version side by side I totally see what you mean about it looking burnt and less organic. I was trying add more depth by darkening the background like @Joanne-Roberts suggested but I think I overdid it. I will have another go with the shadows!

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                                    • Anna Lindsay
                                      Anna Lindsay last edited by

                                      updated version, feeling a bit happier with it now... I think šŸ˜…
                                      Dragonflyer3.jpg

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                                      • alicia
                                        alicia @Anna Lindsay last edited by

                                        @Annabishop Beautiful! Looks much better!

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                                        • Jacy13
                                          Jacy13 @Anna Lindsay last edited by

                                          @Annabishop It looks awesome! I really like the overall composition of the piece. The dragonflies are really cute as well šŸ™‚

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                                          • jennaivy
                                            jennaivy @Anna Lindsay last edited by

                                            @Annabishop This is beautiful! Great work! 😃

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