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    • CukiArtist
      CukiArtist last edited by

      This is such a cute concept. I agree with @Jonas-Zavacky, it feels to me like they are in their own little world so I think either colours or lighting to emphasise that would be good.

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      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by Nyrryl Cadiz

        @Aleksey i would avoid using those little bulbs as your main source of light. What I would suggest is to have a spotlight just outside of your illustration’s frame, shining over your characters. You can still have your little bulbs but I suggest keeping them at a minimum so that they won’t be too attention stealing.

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        Here are some references for you to consider. This Napoleon Bonaparte one is my fave but the colors in that 13 reasons why piece is also great.

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        I hope this has all been helpful

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        • ArtofAleksey
          ArtofAleksey @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

          @nyrrylcadiz ohh i see. Ty! This is very helpful

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          alekseyillustration.com

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          • Chip Valecek
            Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

            Looks great so far, my only suggestion would be to add or move the characters over to the right some more. The right side of the image feels empty and the left side feels heavy. Unless you are keeping that area open for text, then I can see why.


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            • ArtofAleksey
              ArtofAleksey @Chip Valecek last edited by

              @Chip-Valecek i tried that but didnt like it. I’m going to put some stuff there but no characters

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              • braden H
                braden H @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                @Aleksey The first thing that comes to mind that'll fit in that empty space bottom right is a big ol' punch bowl mostly out of frame.

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                • ArtofAleksey
                  ArtofAleksey @braden H last edited by

                  @Braden-Hallett that’s what i was thinking! Im struggling to figure out what to put in the back against the wall. Maybe a curtain?

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                  • braden H
                    braden H @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                    @Aleksey It could just be left as a dark space. Dances in gyms are usually pretty low light

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                    • ArtofAleksey
                      ArtofAleksey last edited by

                      @Braden-Hallett yeah I put a single element in the back and it seems to works pretty well.

                      @Chip-Valecek hows this?
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                      • burvantill
                        burvantill Moderator @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                        @Aleksey this is looking good but I think that table is a little busy. I like @Braden-Hallett s idea about the big bowl. And for some reason the cane keeps grabbing my eye away. I hope you don’t mind but I played a little with the crop and foreground.
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                        Lisa Burvant
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                        • ArtofAleksey
                          ArtofAleksey @burvantill last edited by

                          @burvantill no I don’t mind. I put the cane there intentionally because i think it adds a little bit more story. And i see the bigger punch bowl makes sense but the right side feels emptier now for some reason.

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                          • burvantill
                            burvantill Moderator @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                            @Aleksey I agree. Maybe a different angle or perspective on the cane. 🤔

                            Lisa Burvant
                            www.lisaburvant.com
                            Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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                            • ArtofAleksey
                              ArtofAleksey @burvantill last edited by

                              @burvantill yeah that’s a good point. I flipped it and added a few more elements. I think using color and values with the spotlight will really help bring this together. What do you think?
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                              • avfarrar
                                avfarrar @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                @Aleksey Yeah. I think I like how this one is turning out. Keep up the good work!

                                There is beauty in life!

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                                • ArtofAleksey
                                  ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                  Ok so here is a updated version done in pencil
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                                  • ArtofAleksey
                                    ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                    I think I might scrap this idea and do a different one that’s more fun

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