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    • Chip Valecek
      Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

      Looks great so far, my only suggestion would be to add or move the characters over to the right some more. The right side of the image feels empty and the left side feels heavy. Unless you are keeping that area open for text, then I can see why.


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      • ArtofAleksey
        ArtofAleksey @Chip Valecek last edited by

        @Chip-Valecek i tried that but didnt like it. I’m going to put some stuff there but no characters

        instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
        alekseyillustration.com

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        • braden H
          braden H @ArtofAleksey last edited by

          @Aleksey The first thing that comes to mind that'll fit in that empty space bottom right is a big ol' punch bowl mostly out of frame.

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          • ArtofAleksey
            ArtofAleksey @braden H last edited by

            @Braden-Hallett that’s what i was thinking! Im struggling to figure out what to put in the back against the wall. Maybe a curtain?

            instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
            alekseyillustration.com

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            • braden H
              braden H @ArtofAleksey last edited by

              @Aleksey It could just be left as a dark space. Dances in gyms are usually pretty low light

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              • ArtofAleksey
                ArtofAleksey last edited by

                @Braden-Hallett yeah I put a single element in the back and it seems to works pretty well.

                @Chip-Valecek hows this?
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                alekseyillustration.com

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                • burvantill
                  burvantill Moderator @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                  @Aleksey this is looking good but I think that table is a little busy. I like @Braden-Hallett s idea about the big bowl. And for some reason the cane keeps grabbing my eye away. I hope you don’t mind but I played a little with the crop and foreground.
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                  Lisa Burvant
                  www.lisaburvant.com
                  Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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                  • ArtofAleksey
                    ArtofAleksey @burvantill last edited by

                    @burvantill no I don’t mind. I put the cane there intentionally because i think it adds a little bit more story. And i see the bigger punch bowl makes sense but the right side feels emptier now for some reason.

                    instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                    alekseyillustration.com

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                    • burvantill
                      burvantill Moderator @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                      @Aleksey I agree. Maybe a different angle or perspective on the cane. 🤔

                      Lisa Burvant
                      www.lisaburvant.com
                      Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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                      • ArtofAleksey
                        ArtofAleksey @burvantill last edited by

                        @burvantill yeah that’s a good point. I flipped it and added a few more elements. I think using color and values with the spotlight will really help bring this together. What do you think?
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                        instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                        alekseyillustration.com

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                        • avfarrar
                          avfarrar @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                          @Aleksey Yeah. I think I like how this one is turning out. Keep up the good work!

                          There is beauty in life!

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                          • ArtofAleksey
                            ArtofAleksey last edited by

                            Ok so here is a updated version done in pencil
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                            instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                            alekseyillustration.com

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                            • ArtofAleksey
                              ArtofAleksey last edited by

                              I think I might scrap this idea and do a different one that’s more fun

                              instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                              alekseyillustration.com

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