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    • Ailantan
      Ailantan last edited by

      I really like #5, I feel most drawn to it. Number #2 have a nice road that feels like travel, but I do not like traveling towards sunset that much. Depends on what the story is about. Number #4 looks like nice rest in shadow, #6 like entering somewhere dangerous.

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      • ?
        A Former User last edited by

        I love number 1 or number 5!

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        • Jonas Zavacky
          Jonas Zavacky last edited by Jonas Zavacky

          I guess I will go with the 5th one 🙂 It is my favorite as well 😃 Thanks for feedback

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          • Jonas Zavacky
            Jonas Zavacky last edited by

            Ok made some progress 🙂 Linework + values. I feel like I can push it more with the plants and stuff, but I am afraid I will make a huge mess from that. So, for now, that is what I have... any comment before I move onto color?

            ilustrace.jpg

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            • Ailantan
              Ailantan last edited by

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              I played with it a bit, how do you feel about this: I decreased the value of the tree on the left and increased one in the middle, so the contrast between light character and a dark tree is bigger. Also how about more diagonal grass embarkment, for increased interest? Btw you lineart is amazing, I love it, can't wait to see more 😃

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              • Jonas Zavacky
                Jonas Zavacky @Ailantan last edited by Jonas Zavacky

                @Ailantan Thanks for suggestions. Yes adding more contrast between the character and the tree is probably needed. With the grass, I would like to keep it real low and passive, but It suggests me that it needs more interest so I will play with that! Thank you! 🙂

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                • Kevin Longueil
                  Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                  @Jonas-Zavacky Looking good! I did a quick cut and paste of my thoughts too - my only thought was that moving her to one side of the composition would help balance the image and possibly give you the opportunity to do a longer stretch of the interesting lighting you are doing between the trees in front of her - i went a bit far with the light in my quick cut and paste but it shows the idea - just a thought though 🙂Untitled_Artwork 2.jpg

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                  • Jonas Zavacky
                    Jonas Zavacky @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                    @Kevin-Longueil I am on the fence right now. I kinda like the composition what I have right now, but I am not 100% convinced with it and your take on it is definitely interesting (a lot) but I am not sure if it helps to convey the feel what I want from it. anyway, thanks for the suggestion.

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                    • Jonas Zavacky
                      Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                      alright, I think I'm done with this. Realized that I still really don't understand a whole lot about rendering hehe

                      ilustrace.jpg

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                      • evilrobot
                        evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

                        @Jonas-Zavacky Looks fantastic. Nice work.

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                        • Jonas Zavacky
                          Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                          thank you @evilrobot

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                          • theprairiefox
                            theprairiefox last edited by

                            @Jonas-Zavacky It is sweet seeing you process with these. Looking great and keep posting.

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                            • Jonas Zavacky
                              Jonas Zavacky @theprairiefox last edited by

                              @theprairiefox your comment is sweet 😃 Thank you 🙂

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                              • burvantill
                                burvantill Moderator @Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                                @Jonas-Zavacky this is nice. Whether you go with any of @Kevin-Longueil suggestions or not I think decreasing the brightness in the light beam that is behind them (on the right) will help the focus on where they are headed.

                                Lisa Burvant
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                                • Jonas Zavacky
                                  Jonas Zavacky @burvantill last edited by

                                  @burvantill Thank you! Yeah, you are right. That part is kinda stealing my attention

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