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    • Ailantan
      Ailantan last edited by

      diagonal.jpg

      I played with it a bit, how do you feel about this: I decreased the value of the tree on the left and increased one in the middle, so the contrast between light character and a dark tree is bigger. Also how about more diagonal grass embarkment, for increased interest? Btw you lineart is amazing, I love it, can't wait to see more 😃

      https://www.instagram.com/ailantanart/

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      • Jonas Zavacky
        Jonas Zavacky @Ailantan last edited by Jonas Zavacky

        @Ailantan Thanks for suggestions. Yes adding more contrast between the character and the tree is probably needed. With the grass, I would like to keep it real low and passive, but It suggests me that it needs more interest so I will play with that! Thank you! 🙂

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        • Kevin Longueil
          Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Jonas Zavacky last edited by

          @Jonas-Zavacky Looking good! I did a quick cut and paste of my thoughts too - my only thought was that moving her to one side of the composition would help balance the image and possibly give you the opportunity to do a longer stretch of the interesting lighting you are doing between the trees in front of her - i went a bit far with the light in my quick cut and paste but it shows the idea - just a thought though 🙂Untitled_Artwork 2.jpg

          Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
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          • Jonas Zavacky
            Jonas Zavacky @Kevin Longueil last edited by

            @Kevin-Longueil I am on the fence right now. I kinda like the composition what I have right now, but I am not 100% convinced with it and your take on it is definitely interesting (a lot) but I am not sure if it helps to convey the feel what I want from it. anyway, thanks for the suggestion.

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            • Jonas Zavacky
              Jonas Zavacky last edited by

              alright, I think I'm done with this. Realized that I still really don't understand a whole lot about rendering hehe

              ilustrace.jpg

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              • evilrobot
                evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

                @Jonas-Zavacky Looks fantastic. Nice work.

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                • Jonas Zavacky
                  Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                  thank you @evilrobot

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                  • theprairiefox
                    theprairiefox last edited by

                    @Jonas-Zavacky It is sweet seeing you process with these. Looking great and keep posting.

                    -The Prairie Fox
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                    • Jonas Zavacky
                      Jonas Zavacky @theprairiefox last edited by

                      @theprairiefox your comment is sweet 😃 Thank you 🙂

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                      • burvantill
                        burvantill Moderator @Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                        @Jonas-Zavacky this is nice. Whether you go with any of @Kevin-Longueil suggestions or not I think decreasing the brightness in the light beam that is behind them (on the right) will help the focus on where they are headed.

                        Lisa Burvant
                        www.lisaburvant.com
                        Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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                        • Jonas Zavacky
                          Jonas Zavacky @burvantill last edited by

                          @burvantill Thank you! Yeah, you are right. That part is kinda stealing my attention

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