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    MARCH WIP: Critique always appreciated.

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    • sarahlash
      sarahlash last edited by

      I love your mice - I would go with the firecracker or dance party. ...Though the raccoon idea caught my attention, too.

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      • TessaW
        TessaW last edited by TessaW

        Really great brainstorming for ideas! 1. Now that I know what the monster was up to, it adds a lot of humor to your last piece where the monster is falling outside the boy's window. 😂

        That being said, I think 2 and 5 are my favorites. I do like 4 and 6, but I think they'd work better in a series, where you'd get more context and resolve for the trauma that's happening to the characters.

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        • deborah Haagenson
          deborah Haagenson last edited by

          My choice is 2!

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          • NicolaSchofield
            NicolaSchofield last edited by

            Ooh, I like 7, the mouse dance party or 2, the firecrackers. Probably 7 over 2 for the idea but 2 over 7 for the potential wow impact of the image.

            Nicola Schofield

            Twitter: twitter.com/NSchofieldArt
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            • burvantill
              burvantill Moderator last edited by burvantill

              TWO! The mice with the fireworks. I love the POV and the idea. 😃

              Lisa Burvant
              www.lisaburvant.com
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              • burvantill
                burvantill Moderator @chrisaakins last edited by burvantill

                @chrisaakins FYI. I THINK the poll is this button. 🙂
                E3F2683F-331F-47A0-AC03-250201949E85.jpeg

                Lisa Burvant
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                • chrisaakins
                  chrisaakins last edited by

                  Did no one notice I put 5 twice? It's been a long day...

                  Chris Akins
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                  • TessaW
                    TessaW @chrisaakins last edited by

                    @chrisaakins I did notice and actually mentioned 5 in my first comment twice, but changed one to 6 to avoid confusion. 😜

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                    • Chip Valecek
                      Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @chrisaakins last edited by

                      @chrisaakins #2 right away jumped out for me. I love how you do your mice and that would fit great with your other work as well.


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                      • eriberart
                        eriberart last edited by

                        I like 2! Looks really dynamic and immediately caught my eye

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                        • T
                          TylerDraws last edited by

                          I like numbers 2 and 5!

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                          • chrisaakins
                            chrisaakins last edited by

                            Here is a color study and a potential layout.
                            Questions:
                            How is the compositional layout?
                            What is working?
                            What would you change?
                            Does it read that the mice lit the fireworks?
                            Does it fit the theme?
                            Should I include a little "whistling kitty chaser" reference? (Why else would the mice be into the fireworks?)
                            Shake Rattle and Roll.jpg

                            Chris Akins
                            www.chrisakinsart.com
                            www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                            • NicolaSchofield
                              NicolaSchofield @chrisaakins last edited by

                              @chrisaakins one thing that made the thumbnail of this stand out for me was that the fireworks broke the frame of the image. Are you planning to keep that in the final image? This larger version feels a bit tame now compared to the thumbnail.

                              Nicola Schofield

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                              • chrisaakins
                                chrisaakins last edited by

                                Here is more progress. Thanks for the critique @neschof I changed it to make it a more centered composition and made it so they are breaking the frame.
                                March WIP.JPG

                                Chris Akins
                                www.chrisakinsart.com
                                www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                                • chrisaakins
                                  chrisaakins last edited by

                                  Adding texture as I begin to paint my background.
                                  March WIP.JPG

                                  Chris Akins
                                  www.chrisakinsart.com
                                  www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                                  • sarahlash
                                    sarahlash @chrisaakins last edited by

                                    @chrisaakins Great job so far! I also loved the mice breaking the frame - glad you added it back in.

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                                    • Jeremy Ross
                                      Jeremy Ross @chrisaakins last edited by

                                      Hi @chrisaakins, I like #1 because it flows well with your last piece!

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                                      • NicolaSchofield
                                        NicolaSchofield @chrisaakins last edited by

                                        @chrisaakins looking great so far!

                                        Nicola Schofield

                                        Twitter: twitter.com/NSchofieldArt
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                                        • Coley
                                          Coley last edited by

                                          Eek too cute!

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