February contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always welcome!

braden H

I cleaned up option A. Initially the window was lit, but it was still really overpowering, so I figured, why not dark? I think the star that's fallen too far onto the roof is enough of a draw to bring the eye down. Also, blue balloons. If the kids in the balloons are the focal point, they gotta contrast more

Or maybe I could have the moon embedded in the thatched roof?

I also added an option. I REALLY like the idea of an umbrella blocking nightfall. Dunno why

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idid

So lovely, all of them! Though I love option A most!

Aaron_T

Always love your concepts. I've been playing around with the idea of a dragon flying up from the horizon, pulling the night sky up with him, but now kind of feel like it may be too close in concept to yours. I need to get on the forum more often!

braden H

@idid Still A! Sounds good

braden H

@Aaron_T said in February contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always welcome!:

pulling the night sky up with him, but now kind of feel like it may be too close in concept to yours

I'm absolutely CERTAIN that my concepts are close to others (if not EERILY similar with option D) Please PLEASE run with your concept because I think it's really neat

Laurel Aylesworth

@Braden-Hallett Oh my gosh...A!

braden H

@Laurel-Aylesworth Yup. I think A's gonna win it

braden H

I'm gonna do this one as well as option 'A' since it's really really easy and fast (and I really like it)

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Chip Valecek

@Braden-Hallett I really love the idea of A. But I am sure whatever you decide on will be amazing as always.

Nyrryl Cadiz

They’re all amazing!

baileyvidler

@Braden-Hallett I love love love option A! That is so clever, I've never seen anything like it before!

The umbrella idea is cool too. I do think it reads better when the night wraps around the umbrella. (Like your first post, rather than the second.)

Coley

@Braden-Hallett ok A is really awesome but this really sells me on C as well. I am so glad you are doing both!

braden H

I think A's the one to pursue, then Thanks everyone for weighing in.

Churning out option C. I'm gonna add either a toy truck in the bottom left or a plushy earth hanging in the window.

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braden H

chrisaakins

@Braden-Hallett I can't help but see the girl as a pregnant woman looking out the window with a really bad denim skirt creating a tangent. It took me some study to realize its a blanket. Sorry! Blame it on my old eyes.

braden H

@chrisaakins lol fair enough! I think minus the teddy bear may make it clearer

xin li

@Braden-Hallett I also thought it was a woman leaning towards the window the first time I saw this image. I think the shape of the blanket looks a bit like a woman's dress.

I really love your concept, but there is something not working for me in this image: I think since you are choosing a very minimalistic style for this image, anything you included became very prominent. I am not entirely sure why there are a blanket and a toy truck in terms of the story. I would consider a mini spaceship, instead of the truck for example.
I would also work a bit more on the shape of the spaceship window. Right now the overall shape is a bit distracting for me. My brain is trying to figure out what those dark shapes are before I notice the main character.

Hope this makes sense.

braden H

@xin-li Absolutely makes sense! It's amazing how important silhouette is and how often it's actually something entirely different unintentionally (I'm amazed I haven't accidentally silhouetted something naughty in my work yet. That I know of...)

I was thinking blanky and jammies meant bedtime The toy truck's just a toy that may make it into the bedroom. I like the idea of a kid living in space having a bedroom that's very normal and distinctly UN space-themed. Goodness knows if I were woken up early for spacewalks every bloody day I wouldn't want a toy spaceship.

I think the original thumbnail worked, so I'll go back to that as well as another version where it's obviously a very standard messy bedroom.

Either way back to the drawing board!

Thank you for the feedback

burvantill

@Braden-Hallett i agree with your reasoning about the toy truck, but what about a futuristic dump truck? If there is space tech enough to live there, then we have had to have made improvements for our moon construction vehicles. Plus it’s an opportunity to design something cool. ...

chrisaakins

@burvantill ooo. 1 point for Lisa, 0 points for Braden.