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    • alicia
      alicia @Anna Lindsay last edited by alicia

      @Annabishop Beautiful piece! I love how her hair is flowing in the breeze! If it were me, I’d go through and add shadow and highlights just to give the painting a bit more dimension. Great job!

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      • Jordi Ventura
        Jordi Ventura last edited by

        @Annabishop hey its a beatiful piece!! Ready to go!

        If you ask for adjusments...I think the image is already working but..mmm maybe you can add a little more light on the big flower to generate some contrast, but as I said is already working, good job!

        https://jordiventuraart.com
        https://www.instagram.com/jordiventura.art/

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        • Anna Lindsay
          Anna Lindsay @alicia last edited by

          @alicia Thank you! I think you're right, I'll have a go at adding some more shadows and highlights.

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          • Anna Lindsay
            Anna Lindsay @Jordi Ventura last edited by

            @Jordi-Ventura Thank you! I will have a go at adding some more highlights to the flower. I was a bit worried it would compete with the focal point if it had too much contrast but I'll try it out and see what it looks like. 👍

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              Joanne Roberts last edited by

              Hi! I'm new to SVS forums so I hope this is okay. I like a lot of things about your piece especially the world you've created here. I wonder if you could strengthen the focal point by darkening the flowers etc? As is, the three flowers, the girl on the dragonfly, and even the large lily pad on the bottom almost read as on the same plane? Good job and good luck!

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              • Anna Lindsay
                Anna Lindsay last edited by

                Thank you @Joanne-Roberts, @alicia, and @Jordi-Ventura for the feedback! Is this working better? dragonflyer2.jpg

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                • Jordi Ventura
                  Jordi Ventura last edited by Jordi Ventura

                  @Annabishop hmmm honestly Anna I like more the last version.

                  It feels your darken more the image and burn it a little bit, the last version everything feels more organic, I dont know how to explain it!

                  Just my honest opinion! Anyways as I told you is a very good image you will be selected for sure ;)!

                  I did some paintover of I was pointing on my last coment, you already had a good mood on that image so if you want to improve it, its about adding little details here and there, working with adding some shadows or lights but being carefull to dont break all the value armony that you already have ( becouse its working! )

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                  https://jordiventuraart.com
                  https://www.instagram.com/jordiventura.art/

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                  • alicia
                    alicia @Jordi Ventura last edited by

                    @Jordi-Ventura I totally agree with everything Jordi said. Her paint over nails the types of shadows & highlights I had in mind.

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                    • Anna Lindsay
                      Anna Lindsay last edited by

                      @Jordi-Ventura Thank you so much for taking the time to do a paint-over and give detailed feedback! Now that I look at the old version and new version side by side I totally see what you mean about it looking burnt and less organic. I was trying add more depth by darkening the background like @Joanne-Roberts suggested but I think I overdid it. I will have another go with the shadows!

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                      • Anna Lindsay
                        Anna Lindsay last edited by

                        updated version, feeling a bit happier with it now... I think 😅
                        Dragonflyer3.jpg

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                        • alicia
                          alicia @Anna Lindsay last edited by

                          @Annabishop Beautiful! Looks much better!

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                          • Jacy13
                            Jacy13 @Anna Lindsay last edited by

                            @Annabishop It looks awesome! I really like the overall composition of the piece. The dragonflies are really cute as well 🙂

                            Deviantart: https://www.deviantart.com/jacy13
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                            • jennaivy
                              jennaivy @Anna Lindsay last edited by

                              @Annabishop This is beautiful! Great work! 😃

                              www.jennaivy.com
                              www.instagram.com/jennaivyillustration

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                              • Anna Lindsay
                                Anna Lindsay last edited by

                                @alicia @Jacy13 @jennaivy Thank you!!

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                                • cszoltan
                                  cszoltan @Anna Lindsay last edited by

                                  @Annabishop Hey Anna, I really love your illustration! The only thing that I would add is that your main character has the same value as the Lilly pads on the surface of the water, if you look from a distance, they kind of all blend together in to a pattern. Maybe if you tried to blend in the background with the waters color a bit, or try some kind of atmospheric perspective to make the centerpiece pop.

                                  C.S.Zoltan
                                  Portfolio: www.behance.net/cszoltan
                                  Instagram: www.instagram.com/c.s.zoltan

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                                  • Anna Lindsay
                                    Anna Lindsay @cszoltan last edited by

                                    @cszoltan I’ve already submitted it, but thank you anyway 🙂

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