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    MARCH WIP: Critique always appreciated.

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    • TessaW
      TessaW last edited by TessaW

      Really great brainstorming for ideas! 1. Now that I know what the monster was up to, it adds a lot of humor to your last piece where the monster is falling outside the boy's window. 😂

      That being said, I think 2 and 5 are my favorites. I do like 4 and 6, but I think they'd work better in a series, where you'd get more context and resolve for the trauma that's happening to the characters.

      Website: www.tessawrathall.com

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      • deborah Haagenson
        deborah Haagenson last edited by

        My choice is 2!

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        • NicolaSchofield
          NicolaSchofield last edited by

          Ooh, I like 7, the mouse dance party or 2, the firecrackers. Probably 7 over 2 for the idea but 2 over 7 for the potential wow impact of the image.

          Nicola Schofield

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          • burvantill
            burvantill Moderator last edited by burvantill

            TWO! The mice with the fireworks. I love the POV and the idea. 😃

            Lisa Burvant
            www.lisaburvant.com
            Instagram & Twitter & SVS: @burvantill

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            • burvantill
              burvantill Moderator @chrisaakins last edited by burvantill

              @chrisaakins FYI. I THINK the poll is this button. 🙂
              E3F2683F-331F-47A0-AC03-250201949E85.jpeg

              Lisa Burvant
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              • chrisaakins
                chrisaakins last edited by

                Did no one notice I put 5 twice? It's been a long day...

                Chris Akins
                www.chrisakinsart.com
                www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                • TessaW
                  TessaW @chrisaakins last edited by

                  @chrisaakins I did notice and actually mentioned 5 in my first comment twice, but changed one to 6 to avoid confusion. 😜

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                  • Chip Valecek
                    Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @chrisaakins last edited by

                    @chrisaakins #2 right away jumped out for me. I love how you do your mice and that would fit great with your other work as well.


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                    • eriberart
                      eriberart last edited by

                      I like 2! Looks really dynamic and immediately caught my eye

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                      • T
                        TylerDraws last edited by

                        I like numbers 2 and 5!

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                        • chrisaakins
                          chrisaakins last edited by

                          Here is a color study and a potential layout.
                          Questions:
                          How is the compositional layout?
                          What is working?
                          What would you change?
                          Does it read that the mice lit the fireworks?
                          Does it fit the theme?
                          Should I include a little "whistling kitty chaser" reference? (Why else would the mice be into the fireworks?)
                          Shake Rattle and Roll.jpg

                          Chris Akins
                          www.chrisakinsart.com
                          www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                          • NicolaSchofield
                            NicolaSchofield @chrisaakins last edited by

                            @chrisaakins one thing that made the thumbnail of this stand out for me was that the fireworks broke the frame of the image. Are you planning to keep that in the final image? This larger version feels a bit tame now compared to the thumbnail.

                            Nicola Schofield

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                            Instagram: instagram.com/NicolaSchofieldArt/

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                            • chrisaakins
                              chrisaakins last edited by

                              Here is more progress. Thanks for the critique @neschof I changed it to make it a more centered composition and made it so they are breaking the frame.
                              March WIP.JPG

                              Chris Akins
                              www.chrisakinsart.com
                              www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                              • chrisaakins
                                chrisaakins last edited by

                                Adding texture as I begin to paint my background.
                                March WIP.JPG

                                Chris Akins
                                www.chrisakinsart.com
                                www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                                • sarahlash
                                  sarahlash @chrisaakins last edited by

                                  @chrisaakins Great job so far! I also loved the mice breaking the frame - glad you added it back in.

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                                  • Jeremy Ross
                                    Jeremy Ross @chrisaakins last edited by

                                    Hi @chrisaakins, I like #1 because it flows well with your last piece!

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                                    • NicolaSchofield
                                      NicolaSchofield @chrisaakins last edited by

                                      @chrisaakins looking great so far!

                                      Nicola Schofield

                                      Twitter: twitter.com/NSchofieldArt
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                                      • Coley
                                        Coley last edited by

                                        Eek too cute!

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