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    MARCH WIP: Critique always appreciated.

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    • deborah Haagenson
      deborah Haagenson last edited by

      My choice is 2!

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      • NicolaSchofield
        NicolaSchofield last edited by

        Ooh, I like 7, the mouse dance party or 2, the firecrackers. Probably 7 over 2 for the idea but 2 over 7 for the potential wow impact of the image.

        Nicola Schofield

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        • burvantill
          burvantill Moderator last edited by burvantill

          TWO! The mice with the fireworks. I love the POV and the idea. 😃

          Lisa Burvant
          www.lisaburvant.com
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          • burvantill
            burvantill Moderator @chrisaakins last edited by burvantill

            @chrisaakins FYI. I THINK the poll is this button. 🙂
            E3F2683F-331F-47A0-AC03-250201949E85.jpeg

            Lisa Burvant
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            • chrisaakins
              chrisaakins last edited by

              Did no one notice I put 5 twice? It's been a long day...

              Chris Akins
              www.chrisakinsart.com
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              • TessaW
                TessaW @chrisaakins last edited by

                @chrisaakins I did notice and actually mentioned 5 in my first comment twice, but changed one to 6 to avoid confusion. 😜

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                • Chip Valecek
                  Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @chrisaakins last edited by

                  @chrisaakins #2 right away jumped out for me. I love how you do your mice and that would fit great with your other work as well.


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                  • eriberart
                    eriberart last edited by

                    I like 2! Looks really dynamic and immediately caught my eye

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                    • T
                      TylerDraws last edited by

                      I like numbers 2 and 5!

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                      • chrisaakins
                        chrisaakins last edited by

                        Here is a color study and a potential layout.
                        Questions:
                        How is the compositional layout?
                        What is working?
                        What would you change?
                        Does it read that the mice lit the fireworks?
                        Does it fit the theme?
                        Should I include a little "whistling kitty chaser" reference? (Why else would the mice be into the fireworks?)
                        Shake Rattle and Roll.jpg

                        Chris Akins
                        www.chrisakinsart.com
                        www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                        • NicolaSchofield
                          NicolaSchofield @chrisaakins last edited by

                          @chrisaakins one thing that made the thumbnail of this stand out for me was that the fireworks broke the frame of the image. Are you planning to keep that in the final image? This larger version feels a bit tame now compared to the thumbnail.

                          Nicola Schofield

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                          • chrisaakins
                            chrisaakins last edited by

                            Here is more progress. Thanks for the critique @neschof I changed it to make it a more centered composition and made it so they are breaking the frame.
                            March WIP.JPG

                            Chris Akins
                            www.chrisakinsart.com
                            www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                            • chrisaakins
                              chrisaakins last edited by

                              Adding texture as I begin to paint my background.
                              March WIP.JPG

                              Chris Akins
                              www.chrisakinsart.com
                              www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                              • sarahlash
                                sarahlash @chrisaakins last edited by

                                @chrisaakins Great job so far! I also loved the mice breaking the frame - glad you added it back in.

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                                • Jeremy Ross
                                  Jeremy Ross @chrisaakins last edited by

                                  Hi @chrisaakins, I like #1 because it flows well with your last piece!

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                                  • NicolaSchofield
                                    NicolaSchofield @chrisaakins last edited by

                                    @chrisaakins looking great so far!

                                    Nicola Schofield

                                    Twitter: twitter.com/NSchofieldArt
                                    Instagram: instagram.com/NicolaSchofieldArt/

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                                    • Coley
                                      Coley last edited by

                                      Eek too cute!

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