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    • KevinTreaccar
      KevinTreaccar last edited by

      I think the chimneys are working. Just like the whole rest of the thing.

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      • Valerie Light
        Valerie Light last edited by

        This is completely charming. I really like your line work here, and I love seeing how you worked through silhouettes and roughs to get to this point.

        I like the 2 little chimneys at the top- lots of busy, angled, active things to look at. My one comment is that the attachment of the structure to the branch above looks a little awkward, mainly because the top curve of the structure and the lower right part of the branch share a tangent that makes the branch seem squeezed.

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        • lizardillo
          lizardillo last edited by

          Hi All,

          Thanks for the feedback. I have drawn back over with a thinner brush to try and keep the detail crisper.

          @Kevintreaccar I actually deleted the chimneys before seeing this but I have added them back in as chimney 'flower' pots. @Valerie-Light I have had a look at the branch connection again and gone back to a string loop to give a bit of space between the branch. Thanks for pointing this out. Hope this looks a little better.

          Thanks again everyone. It's a race to colour it now but I have really enjoyed this (eventually - after all of the frustrated revisions ๐Ÿ˜‚ ). The wooden cross beams will go on last, they may be a bit too much.

          Looking forward to having a good look through the prompt thread later and seeing everyone's entries.

          Bee_Inn_Lines.png

          Website: lizardillo.co.uk
          IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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          • Georgios Christopoulos
            Georgios Christopoulos @lizardillo last edited by

            @lizardillo I don't know how the colours will go, but I am Pretty sure this will be a winning piece. Congrats in advance!

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            Deviantart : https://www.deviantart.com/g-chris

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            • lizardillo
              lizardillo @Georgios Christopoulos last edited by lizardillo

              @Georgios-Christopoulos thank you. Iโ€™m not sure if Iโ€™ve put too much on here to be honest, but Iโ€™ve enjoyed myself creating it. I love yours too. That shark on the top of the lighthouse has such a great expression.

              Website: lizardillo.co.uk
              IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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              • lizardillo
                lizardillo last edited by

                The finished article. Thanks for your feedback all, it's really appreciated.

                Inn_April21-LizOrton.jpg

                Website: lizardillo.co.uk
                IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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                • lizardillo
                  lizardillo last edited by lizardillo

                  I hope you don't mind but I just wanted to say thank you so much for all of the feedback, support and encouragement. For someone just finding their feet and trying to start a career in something she's always loved, it really means a lot.โ  I've popped this on instagram but I just wanted to say it in person here.

                  As someone not sure if how to approach potential clients I have found working to live briefs so useful and seeing everyone else's approach to the same brief is so great. I had not realised how wonderful it is to be part of a supportive and talented community who help and learn from each other.

                  I would really love to be able to have all three prompts to put up on my portfolio site (when I rework it) so I can be one step closer to plucking up the to courage to pitch for some paid work in this new direction I am trying to go in. I have never drawn a full environment before so I may ask for a little help with this month's prompt if that is ok. I will try to help others as much as I can but I am always a little nervous about posting a comment. I'm a bit of a British introvert sorry.

                  Drinks are on me in the Buzz Inn!! ๐Ÿบ ๐Ÿโ 

                  CHEERS!! ๐Ÿป

                  ::EDIT:: As Kevin has pointed out, he does look like he's drinking beer. Please be assured he is giving you a pint of non-alcoholic nectar. I should have thought about that ๐Ÿ˜ƒ #rookieerror

                  Cheers_lizardillo_insta.png

                  Website: lizardillo.co.uk
                  IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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                  • KevinTreaccar
                    KevinTreaccar @lizardillo last edited by

                    @lizardillo Ummmm, is your โ€œyoung travelerโ€ old enough for that drink?

                    kevintreaccar.com
                    instagram.com/kevintreaccar

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                    • lizardillo
                      lizardillo @KevinTreaccar last edited by lizardillo

                      @Kevin-Treaccar It's nectar as it has no alcohol. ๐Ÿ˜‚

                      Website: lizardillo.co.uk
                      IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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                      • ajillustrates
                        ajillustrates @lizardillo last edited by

                        @lizardillo I was so happy that the Buzz Inn got the win; it's an incredible design and beautiful piece! Looking forward to your May illustration, and crossing my fingers for you to secure the hat-trick.

                        https://ajillustrates.com
                        https://www.instagram.com/aj.illustrates/

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                        • Janette
                          Janette last edited by

                          Your process and final piece was a joy to see! Love, love, love the little details and humour in this. Outstanding.

                          Art is hard.
                          https://www.instagram.com/janettehillart/

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                          • lizardillo
                            lizardillo @KevinTreaccar last edited by

                            @Kevin-Treaccar I've updated the post. Thanks for pointing that out, I should have put some flowers on the glass. Oops ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

                            Website: lizardillo.co.uk
                            IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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                            • KevinTreaccar
                              KevinTreaccar @lizardillo last edited by

                              @lizardillo Haha. Good. I was just trying to make sure you didn't get arrested. I don't want to miss your May entry because you were to busy being in jail for giving alcohol to a bee minor.

                              kevintreaccar.com
                              instagram.com/kevintreaccar

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                              • ajillustrates
                                ajillustrates @KevinTreaccar last edited by

                                @Kevin-Treaccar Don't worry - I don't think @lizardillo would be looking at jail time, as that's just a mis-bee-meanor ๐Ÿ˜‰

                                https://ajillustrates.com
                                https://www.instagram.com/aj.illustrates/

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                                • ellenseal_art
                                  ellenseal_art last edited by

                                  Congrats on your victory! It was well deserved โ˜บ

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                                  • lizardillo
                                    lizardillo @ajillustrates last edited by

                                    @ajillustrates best to be careful, we don't want any bad bee-haviour

                                    Website: lizardillo.co.uk
                                    IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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                                    • chrisaakins
                                      chrisaakins @lizardillo last edited by

                                      @lizardillo or is that bad beehive-yer. ๐Ÿ˜‰

                                      Chris Akins
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